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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Dec 29, 2005 23:27:59 GMT -5
WOO!
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 1, 2006 22:15:05 GMT -5
i wrote a new poem today at 1PM!!! hyurr tis!!! i wrote this slightly differently from my others...
*Note* Alcaeus will probably spam this with "ZOMG TAHT IZ EMO DRIVEL!" posts so... yeah... */Note* "Confusion"
All these things I keep inside, Feelings that I try to hide, Unable to keep them away from me, Blinding my thoughts so I can't see.
Lasting emotion, eternal Night, Unable to flee from my endless plight, Words of Destruction, Cries of Doubt, Help me please! I want out!
Gripping darkness, lonely and cold, Refuses to tell what needs to be told, I cannot see the truth beyond the dark, Perhaps 'tis time I should silence my heart.
Lasting emotion, eternal Night, Unable to flee from my endless plight, Words of Destruction, Cries of Doubt, Help me please! I want out!
At last I am taken, far from this place, away from my tortured face, My heart yet beats, my body entrapped, around the human emotions, 'tis wrapped.
Lasting emotion, eternal Night, Unable to flee from my endless plight, Words of Destruction, Cries of Doubt, Help me please! I want out!
review!
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Feb 2, 2006 17:41:55 GMT -5
awesome poem. nuff said.
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 2, 2006 19:06:09 GMT -5
Why thank you! very recent writing that...
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Post by Phayun-C on Feb 3, 2006 19:49:07 GMT -5
Very nice. I like it a lot more than your other one, because I could see a lot more meaning behind it. Chalk it up to your clarity or my ineptitude, it's prolly a bit of both. Only one beef.
Second line needs more syllables, unless you were trying to make it a little choppier there.
Other than that, solid!
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 4, 2006 16:56:02 GMT -5
like i said... or maybe i didn't lol... i wrote that, spur of the moment, in 5 minutes... and it was meant to be like that lol... and thnx teh muchly for not spamming it with emo drivel crap XD
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Feb 4, 2006 22:21:25 GMT -5
velkom.
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 5, 2006 23:04:38 GMT -5
i will post more when i write em XD
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Feb 6, 2006 20:14:54 GMT -5
Ok. XD
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 7, 2006 18:16:16 GMT -5
and when the other slaggers get here XD XD XD
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Feb 7, 2006 20:43:13 GMT -5
XD nuff said XDXD
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 7, 2006 22:14:53 GMT -5
XD copycat XDXD
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Feb 9, 2006 20:22:01 GMT -5
XD so big dealXDXD
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Feb 14, 2006 20:08:57 GMT -5
XD HA! YOU FORGOT THE SPACE BEFORE THE FIRST XD IN THE TWO XD'S! XDXD
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