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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 11, 2005 16:44:25 GMT -5
This is my personal thread dedicated to the wonders of internal muse displayed through poetry... some may use music, song, dance, fast-food-corporate sellouts, anything at all! But i use poetry. so here are a few of my creations.
I will post 2-3 at a time and let you tell me what you think.
Free-hand poetry by William Sellars
Written in the 04-05 school year. Typed in chronological order.
“Lust”
Steaming sonnets softly lolling
give my mind the joy of ease
When they hum, the midnight calling
The raging fire I shall appease.
“Death of the Christ” (Biblical)
Down I fell, towards the pyre
Towards the cruel and evil bell
Into it, I find the fire
It wrings my soul in wretched hell
“Communism”
All alone
I sit and ponder
I must atone
For dreams and wonder
go at it my friends, bring forth thy criticism/praise!
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Post by Phayun-C on Nov 11, 2005 16:49:16 GMT -5
Very nice stuff, Daemon! Would almost believe you're goth!  Very cool. I write a little bit every once in a while, but the constrictions of poetry really aren't my thing. I do more personal, freeform ranting, lol. Very nice stuff, though! |
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 11, 2005 16:51:13 GMT -5
thank you! one or two other reviews and i will add some more!  |
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Post by 31337GamerGirl on Nov 12, 2005 20:05:22 GMT -5
more more!!! I love a guy who writes poetry! It proves he has a sense of depth in a world of two dementions... ^_^ Can we post some of our own poetry too?
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Post by Kenoku on Nov 12, 2005 21:29:48 GMT -5
THats awesome. I know some poetry. Lol...my one friend made this poem:
"People please I need cheese?
Dont you see im in need!?
make my stomache appease!
People please no cheese with seeds!"
LOL. My friend forever be my hero. Well he was kinda fooling around at the moment any way.
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 13, 2005 13:36:58 GMT -5
sure! you can post your own creations like crazy!! btw here are a few more!
“Dreams of Demons”
Darkness brings about all dreams,
Hopes of a brighter ‘morrow.
Also yonder muffled screams
Of lives of untold sorrow.
“Death”
Darkness takes me
Through the flame,
Called them to me,
No one heard, not one came.
“War”
Truth be told
in days of old
With straight and slender arrow
Spear and sword
Would strike a chord
In frightened bone and marrow.
review!
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Nov 14, 2005 17:17:03 GMT -5
That was some deep poetry Daemon. Although I am new to the forum I can tell you are deep person. I must say that "War" and "Christ" really spoke to me.......keep writing in my opinion!! (not that my opinion counts yet or anything
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Post by Kenoku on Nov 14, 2005 18:46:05 GMT -5
Actually thats one of his many better potatoes (qualities). The other one...(which is awesome) is being completly random! ;D Which explains why we get alone so well.  |
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 15, 2005 7:18:28 GMT -5
alright! here are a couple more! (literaly)
“The Search”
Round the meadow
Past the tree
In the shadow
My soul shall be.
“True Fear”
In my soul my mind will tell
Of the flames of burning pyre
Demons come from rotten hell
drag me screaming towards the fire.
review!
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Nov 15, 2005 19:35:37 GMT -5
Thats some good stuff there Daemon, I think you have a real knack for it
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 15, 2005 21:28:47 GMT -5
why thank you! after all is said and done, i would like for you (and everyone else) to tell me your favorite over all! but you absolutely HAVE TO wait until then!
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Nov 20, 2005 21:11:01 GMT -5
Alright Daemon
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 20, 2005 21:12:56 GMT -5
here is one that just got published (for reals!!!!) by the League of American Poets!!! this is also the one that da gamer girl wrote music for ^_^
“Path to Twilight”
Turn away, don’t look back.
Though the road ahead seems black,
Sorrowful mourning, cries of treason,
Strip from your mind all thoughts with reason.
Within the darkness, find your light,
To help you through the endless night,
The aid of emotion, the hurt of doubt,
Will save and destroy your soul throughout.
Though the paths may be bleak
In the twilit darkness of dormant cold,
Find your light, begin to seek
The place from where your story is told.
Within the darkness, find your light,
To help you through the endless night,
The aid of emotion, the hurt of doubt,
Will save and destroy your soul throughout.
Tormented soul! Return to the light!
End this mournful angered night!
Turn from the darkness of your soul!
Make complete your spirit’s toll!
Within the darkness, find your light,
To help you through the endless night,
The aid of emotion, the hurt of doubt,
Will save and destroy your soul throughout.
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Post by thetalkinggrunt on Nov 20, 2005 21:17:42 GMT -5
Wow, that is good Daemon, real good. That really spoke to me........reminded me of a song that said,"I will find You there somewhere in the dark, buried in a place between dead and broken hearts, Theres safety in the Darkness."
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Post by [QVC]-Branmuffin on Nov 20, 2005 21:27:49 GMT -5
huh... never heard of it! all of my stuff is completely original (and apparently publish worthy!) so woo!
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